I can't offer any editing suggestions--if it's too long winded, I wouldn't know, as I tend to do that, too--this post will probably prove that.
As for its usefulness to others, yes, it should be, especially to VFR-only pilots or those with relatively limited/rusty instrument skills or flying airplanes that aren't IFR equipped.
Like many, I've curtailed my flying a bit due to smoke, though we certainly don't have the issues on Colorado's Front Range that you out in the PNW have. On Labor Day morning, I checked local airports and found that the vis was only about 1/2 a mile. But it improved throughout the morning, and by 2:30, both GXY and FNL AWOSs were saying 4 miles. So I decided to go up, with no plans to go anywhere--a little landing practice wouldn't hurt.
Guesstimating visibility while on the ground is pretty hard to do, at least for me, unless I can compare it to some obstacle or terrain feature a known distance away. So I wasn't really sure of the visibility until I was in the air. GXY's 35 is 10,000' long. As I climbed through about 4-500' with about 8000' of the runway ahead of me, I could see past the end of the runway, but 2 1/2 miles past? I didn't think so. I turned crosswind after passing the end of the runway, and looking back toward the approach end of 35, I could just see the highway that is south of the airport--my assessment was that vis was 3 miles, not 4 miles. Other than the runway beside me and the hangars and ANG base at the south end, there wasn't much to see--the town was invisible, the mountains to the west were invisible, there was no horizon. I sure wasn't going to fly anywhere, without filing.
Meanwhile the wind increased and changed direction so that it was quartering off the runway, and it became very gusty. Sure, I can handle that, but the fun went out of it, so I decided to call it a day after only 2 landings. These days I fly for fun, not to prove anything.
As I put the airplane away, I realized that I was breathing pretty hard, and my eyes were very uncomfortable. There's no reason for me to be breathing hard under normal situations, as the electric tug does all the work--I just have to guide it. When I looked in the car's mirror, my eyes looked like they felt. I didn't think to check my pulse-ox; now I wish I had, just to see what the smoke was doing to that.
Overall, I'd have to say that flying in the smoky conditions of Monday wasn't pleasant. My best guess is that a VFR pilot would have found it even more unpleasant, even dangerous. There wasn't any visible horizon any direction, and outside of the airport environment, it would have been difficult to find recognizable checkpoints--electronic navigation would have been necessary. Out of years of habit, I scan the instruments whether it's VMC or IMC and I'm instrument current, so the lack of a horizon wasn't a problem for me. I wasn't going anywhere; if I'd wanted to, I would have filed.
So your article has a lot of merit, especially for VFR-only pilots and those whose airplanes are only VFR.
Cary